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Zenryo by ~kalicodreamz:iconkalicodreamz:

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©2009 ~kalicodreamz
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So, since my last drawing was rather lazy, I went more dynamic this time. And once again attempted another guy.
This is Zenryo...another character from my HS days that has now been revamped from my really terrible drawings.

I was really happy with the sketch, and it came over to inks rather well. And by inks, I mean vector lines in AI. I was less lazy on this background, but I do feel he doesn't seem like he's actually in the background. Any suggestions?

Overall, I'm pretty satisfied, but as always I'd love a critique. And any advice on the above issues I mentioned since I will probably go back and make some adjustments to it.

Other Characters:
Akari: [link]
Ronin: [link]
Yushani: n/a
Zenryo: This one, Stupid.
Pansa: n/a

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~Kyendo May 25, 2009, 4:12:29 PM
Yessss dynamic pose. I like it, I think you might be heading towards something really great with this style. As for critiquing, I don't think there's a lot to say on this one. Maybe his hand, it looks a bit wonky (reference always helps), but at the same time, personally, I like its wonkiness. It's such a cute hand. xD

Also, his nose - his head seems to be slightly tilting downwards, so maybe using a "u"-ish shape would work better, instead of the ". ." nostrils?

My English rocks so hard.

Anyway. Moremoremore! :3
:iconkalicodreamz:
~kalicodreamz May 25, 2009, 6:14:49 PM
I actually used reference for the hand, but it's a tough pose since there's akward bending and foreshortening. It's not perfect, but it's better than I thought it would be, haha.

I'll try out what you suggested with the nose. I also realized the shadows from under his nose disappeared, so I will need to fix that when I go back to rework it.

I'm hoping to be able to do more, but I'm also so excited about this animation collab we're doing, I may have a hard time making time for both <3

And yeah, your english totally rawks my sawks.
Also, you should come on MSN sometimez.
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~Kyendo May 26, 2009, 2:25:31 AM
Ah, then I take back what I said. I think the only problem is that the thumb and pinky are so similar.

I know! Where has my will to chat go? It's been missing for three years or something. Not fun. :[ Hm, maybe this afternoon.
:iconkalicodreamz:
~kalicodreamz May 26, 2009, 7:26:37 AM
I agree on the part about the thumb and the pinky. I'll probably go back and rework that a bit.
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~Luna-XIII May 26, 2009, 10:33:26 AM
I really like the lighting in this piece, and all your other pieces for that matter. It's really effective!

As for him fitting more into the background, I suggest adding slight outlines and/or details to the trees (and maybe bushes) that are close to us, so that they match the way he is done more. Since he is fully outlined, the outline-less trees lack some depth.

On a slightly different note, I think the path (?) should be a little bit wider so that he can do some awesome slashing without hitting some trees XP
:iconkrad014:
~Krad014 May 27, 2009, 5:46:33 AM
Why?Why are you so good? Tell me!
I am so jealous!
I don't know what I should say about this. You are just awesome like always. But somehow I loved your works more when I saw the step by step,you say you are lazy but I think you damn fast. I didn't upload any pics if you take a look in my gallery even I drew around 100. Thats because I am kind of scared if I get any feedback,here are so many good works,so who will look at mine?
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Besind of that what I said. I think the background is looking good, I would sugest that you make a a "ego" persvective,which I mean is: You draw a guy and another one, the one look at him,and we, the watchers only see one of them,you know ego,...and they are fighting in a roof. That would be cool! :heart:

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~kalicodreamz May 27, 2009, 6:39:36 AM
Don't worry about other people's works, just worry about your own. You know I'll give feedback :3


I like your idea, but that would involve me redoing the whole background, and I really truly am lazy, even though you may not believe me, haha.
I still have 2 more characters to do,one whom has a sword, so I'll probably use one of them for your idea.
Thanks for the comment and fav <3
:iconkalicodreamz:
~kalicodreamz May 27, 2009, 6:41:25 AM
Thanks. Lighting is one of my favorite parts. I like doing it. I like doing it a lot.

I was trying to go fore an outline less background, but I think I agree with you...this one may need some outlines to help him fit in a bit better.
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Mood: Love ~Krad014 May 28, 2009, 5:20:13 AM
I love to get and give feedback!

I need to draw my idea so you get better an inspeation!

I love to see your drawing,,you make me really happy and give me ideas with them!

you are always welcome! ♥

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